You want to know one of the problems with my story?
One of the many, many problems?
I have all of these great little moments and details, but it all falls apart at the seams. No transitions. No strong arc. Forgot to make the armature before putting on the papier mache, or what have you.
Giant structural problems. Looks like a big old jellyfish washed up on the beach.
I gots me some more learning to do. Although I guess being able to ID the enemy, or part of it, is a start. Right? Right?